February 5, 2011
so today, the lovely and talented Christine Hardy is hosting the "You've Come a Long Way, Baby" blogfest. this is the day we get to share "a sample of your own early-in-my-learning-process, sort-of-awful-but-I-don't-mind-embarassing-myself writing." what fun.
it took me a little time to decide what to post. i finally chose a scene from the early stages of Eldala. it has spoilers in it, so be warned.
this is the scene where Kieran proposes to Jessa. there's no word count limit that i know of, but it's a little long and rather than take up blog space here, i'll post this on my Eldala blog, but here's a teaser...
Jessa was wearing the purple dress again and Kieran was captured by her beauty, watching her every move. While he tried to eat, he waited with nervous anticipation for the meal to be finished. He wanted to be alone with her. He wondered if he would be able to ask her the question that had been on his mind for so long.
When the meal was finally over, he took her hand and invited her to ride with him. She agreed and took his arm as they went out the door. He saddled Fallon and helped Jessa up, sitting in front of her. She wrapped her arms around him as he spurred the horse towards the shore.
The full moon reflected off the water, and they rode in silence, listening to the wave’s crash onto the shore.
“I’m going to miss this,” she said. “And you most of all.”
He could feel her stifle a sob against his back. He stopped the horse and dismounted, helping her to the ground. They wove their fingers together and walked along the shore. After a few minutes, Kieran led her towards the bluff.
"Where are we going?” Jessa asked.
“A place Kale told me about.”
When they reached the spot, Jessa let out a quick breath. They were in a narrow grotto, carved by a waterfall that spilled from the top of the bluff and came down in ribbons over moss-covered boulders. Each side of the grotto was lined with ferns and grasses.
Jessa sat on a boulder and trembled as Kieran dropped to one knee.
to read the rest go here: I've Come a Long Way. you'll also find a link at the bottom for the final version that made it into the novel.