Kristen over at Take It As It Comes is hosting the Bickering Blogfest today. rather than post something from Blackheart, i thought i'd post a scene from my chick lit from a few years back, First Comes Love. it's 3rd draft stuff, so it's still a little rough.
to set up the scene, Andee is falling for Nate, but he's had so many failed romances that she's trying to protect his heart by telling him she just wants to be friends. after eating at the Cold Stone Creamery, she's explained how she feels and he's trying to talk her out of it. also, she's going to do some comparing here to her old boyfriend, Stuart.
“Nate, I was going to take a chance with you,” I said, “but now that I know your story, I can’t put you through that. I can’t ask you to risk –”
Whoa. This guy didn’t kiss like Stuart at all.
Stuart’s kisses were always restrained and controlled; Nate's kisses were playful and teasing – and a little unpredictable.
Stuart always kept his mouth closed; Nate covered my mouth with his and started to explore. If he kept this up, he was going to have to ask for an explorer’s permit.
Stuart always restricted his kisses to my lips; when Nate had finished with my mouth, he worked his way across my cheek and over to my ear. Sensations I didn’t know were possible crashed through me. If I hadn’t been on the ground, I would have fallen over.
Stuart never kissed in public; Nate and I were in front of a theater, under the lights.
No way. Maybe he didn’t care about kissing in a public space, but I sure did. I pulled away before I could embarrass myself any further.
When I stood and looked down at him, the lights showed a very confused Nate.
“I can’t…,” I stuttered. “I won’t… I knew this was a bad idea.”
I started to stomp away but Nate sprang up and grabbed my arm, spinning me around so fast that I thought I was going to lose my ice cream.
“Andee, you can’t just walk away after saying something like that.”
When I’d recovered from the dizziness, I wouldn’t look up at him. I knew too well how he would affect my brain. “I was trying to tell you something and you interrupted me.”
“I didn’t like where the conversation was going.”
Now I was angry enough to keep my resolve. But I don’t kiss in public and I don’t argue in public. I took his hand (ignoring the zing that still danced between us) and pulled him to a more private area between buildings. The shadows gave me the advantage of not having to look at him. Just to make sure I was going to keep my resolve, I crossed my arms.
“So when you don’t like what you’re hearing, you interrupt with a kiss?” I asked.
“It was only a kiss, Andee. What’s the big deal?”
“First, I take my kisses seriously. And second, I’m uncomfortable with kissing in public.”
“Haven’t you ever wanted to let go and live a little?”
“That wasn’t living. That was exposing me to embarrassment.”
My eyes had adjusted to the dark enough that I could see him put up his hands in surrender. “Sorry to offend you, your highness.”
If I could see his hands going up, he’d be able to see my royal scowl. “The point is –” knave - "I don’t know what’s in my future.”
“So everything has to be planned out to the end for you?”
“It’s the way I am."
“How can you predict the future?”
“How can you not think about the future after what you've been through with Erin and Carrie?”
For a second, he looked like I’d slapped him. “I’m not going to look back and ask ‘what if?’”
“You don’t know what you’re getting into.”
“Stop thinking for me, Andee.”
“I’m ready to go home.”
“And stop changing the subject.”
“At least I don’t use a kiss to change the subject.”
(and if you love blogfests and can stand to do one more, there's mine coming up tomorrow-- the Share Your Darlings Blogfest.)
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i'm Michelle Gregory, a 55-year-old wife, mom, Jesus-follower, beginning French learner, and Arizona native who moved to Montana 6 years ago (yeah--that was a huge change). i collect way too many craft supplies (and occasionally use them), spend way too much time on Instagram and Facebook, obsessively check my email, and own 2 horses, 2 dogs, and 1 very large black cat. i've been working on the sequel to my one fantasy novel for 9 years (don't you feel better now?). i haven't done anything here for a long time, but maybe jumping back into blogging will get the writer side of my brain humming again.
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