tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post4546243436606590228..comments2023-09-15T09:55:04.468-06:00Comments on beautiful chaos: last line blogfestMichelle Gregoryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-77724043666357868852010-05-02T05:50:32.709-06:002010-05-02T05:50:32.709-06:00I only read the last paragraph, in order to captur...I only read the last paragraph, in order to capture the "last line" feeling.<br /><br />Wow, pretty impressive! Yes, LOTR is pretty good training for this kind of stuff. He's really good, Michelle. And you're an excellent editor/storyteller, too!Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-4082218637778743022010-05-01T22:44:00.107-06:002010-05-01T22:44:00.107-06:00Lilah, thanks. it was fun to participate, esp. sin...Lilah, thanks. it was fun to participate, esp. since it was so unexpected. <br /><br />Raquel, when we wrote it, i didn't think about how brutal it was. that didn't cross my mind until readers started making comments here. makes me wonder why my son enjoys writing this stuff. way too much Lord of the Rings and Star Wars in his past, i suppose. but he's a great kid.Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-20220960512121874652010-05-01T22:17:29.013-06:002010-05-01T22:17:29.013-06:00Very vivid and brutal. I like the last line, it sp...Very vivid and brutal. I like the last line, it speaks of more adventure and mayhem to come...and about how much your MC enjoys it all. Good job.Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-19318707703212465232010-05-01T22:12:37.682-06:002010-05-01T22:12:37.682-06:00Great entry and thanks so much for participating!Great entry and thanks so much for participating!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-14681864792724697792010-05-01T21:01:33.826-06:002010-05-01T21:01:33.826-06:00Donna, did i mention this guy is the villain?Donna, did i mention this guy is the villain?Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-88638374038828341542010-05-01T20:33:25.012-06:002010-05-01T20:33:25.012-06:00Oh yeah; what an awesome hero. Deadly and efficie...Oh yeah; what an awesome hero. Deadly and efficient, my favorite. I'm definitely sucked in to read on, find out more about this character and why he's reeking such devastation.<br /><br />I'll have to remember to come back and read more on the link.dolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-85306373394035149872010-05-01T19:12:53.066-06:002010-05-01T19:12:53.066-06:00Shannon and sarahjayne, i agree, my son is very ta...Shannon and sarahjayne, i agree, my son is very talented. we've enjoyed writing this character's POV. <br /><br />Roland, thanks for the comments about the pacing. i'll look at yours now. <br /><br />KM, i know, a little gory. glad that stuff isn't in my brain all the time. <br /><br />Susan, thanks for stopping by. i'm not sure if he wrote the last line or i did. there's no way to remember.Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-9391583133557228872010-05-01T16:34:19.247-06:002010-05-01T16:34:19.247-06:00Great stuff, here! And the last line is perfect. H...Great stuff, here! And the last line is perfect. How cool that you and your son can work together!Susan Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02433408456603462774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-49684562652064894232010-05-01T15:48:37.423-06:002010-05-01T15:48:37.423-06:00That was intense. The swords. The blood. My mind&#...That was intense. The swords. The blood. My mind's spinning. ;) Good scene!Katiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06851403823244758904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-3823558399232889742010-05-01T15:28:46.210-06:002010-05-01T15:28:46.210-06:00He raised his sword and smiled. Great last line. G...He raised his sword and smiled. Great last line. Good, smooth action and pacing.<br /><br />Your son has definite talent. And bravo to you for supporting it. Have a look see at my entry, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-64281266083216063562010-05-01T15:19:22.423-06:002010-05-01T15:19:22.423-06:00How cool that you worked with your son. He is quit...How cool that you worked with your son. He is quite the story teller. And that last line was great. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-72040863570364486232010-05-01T11:33:38.620-06:002010-05-01T11:33:38.620-06:00Wow. I love the visual imagery - so powerful. Yo...Wow. I love the visual imagery - so powerful. You have a talented son! That last line is perfect. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-11800566438342843752010-05-01T11:22:40.959-06:002010-05-01T11:22:40.959-06:00Kristie, thanks. only my son writes the brutal stu...Kristie, thanks. only my son writes the brutal stuff. i'm more into kissing scenes. <br /><br />Christine, i can't wait to read Blackheart either. when will that silly author finally publish the dang thing? Brandon and i love writing together. we're a great team. <br /><br />Ann, glad to meet you. i appreciate the comments. short sentences and i get along very well.Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-2110778247295865772010-05-01T10:36:48.674-06:002010-05-01T10:36:48.674-06:00I like your writing. Very visual. Short sentences ...I like your writing. Very visual. Short sentences - good. Keeps the action moving.<br /><br />I'm new to blogging, less than a month. My novel is supposed to come out in the summer. I'm hoping for this schedule. Even if I weren't getting it published, I would blog now that I've discovered how much fun this is.<br /><br />It will take me some time to browse your blogs (I like your website BTW). Based on this one, I suspect I'll like them. I set up a blog last night for my disabled daughter. I'm hoping she'll write on it. Otherwise, I'll be her voice.<br /><br />Happy to meet you . . .Ann Besthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14628616245339887301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-57825643884233808302010-05-01T10:07:21.360-06:002010-05-01T10:07:21.360-06:00This is great! I can't wait to read Blackheart...This is great! I can't wait to read Blackheart.<br />How fun to be working on this with your son. Nice work!Christine Danekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00979611961825725350noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2056792574534014889.post-87427802290934609612010-05-01T09:58:57.759-06:002010-05-01T09:58:57.759-06:00Wow. Brutal stuff. Nice job. How fun it must be to...Wow. Brutal stuff. Nice job. How fun it must be to work with your son on a WIP. None of mine are interested. At all.Kristie Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01649966564896771373noreply@blogger.com